Amherst’s Lack of Study Space
Collecting data is hard enough but trying to solve the problem is harder. Completing this last final essay was probably the biggest challenge this whole semester. Trying to come up with a solution and modifying it to be like your own was the hardest thing. but I am extremely glad with the way it turned out I couldn’t be more proud of my work.
Primary Research Reflection
Primary research is on a other level of research, beginning this course I was terrified of long papers and finding research. When we began these last two essays I had no idea that it would be this hard. When we had to personally go up to people and survey them for our own data I must admit I was terrified. This essay really made me go out of my comfort zone and made me a little less afraid of talking to strangers. This also made me appreciate all of those who are the ones researching all of the time.
My experience with collaborating was very enjoyable. At first I do admit I was scared that I would be doing all of the work or one of my classmates would refuse to do their part, but luckily my group consisted of Veronica and myself. When beginning the rough draft it was really rough, she offered to do the introduction so I waited so I could start on the body paragraphs we would work on it at different times and sometimes it was difficult to write about something when the other person hasn’t written about what they said they would. I was a little bit worried that the essay wouldn’t flow but when we finally decided to meet up outside of class to revise and put together our work it came together nicely. We met up at a Panera and spent a good 3/4 hours revising and writing more ideas that we came up together. It was hard to meet up with our different schedules and random events that would come up but we did our best. The final revision was rereading it together and catching each other’s mistakes. Because we both have different ways of writing and you are so used to seeing your own way of writing it can be hard to see your mistakes. Once we reread our work we were both very satisfied with the final product. The result of this essay was so extremely satisfying, scoring a 90/100 I couldn’t have asked for a better score, Veronica and myself were extremely happy and very proud of ourselves.
Since the beginning of this semester I have grown as a writer a great amount. Before this semester the most I could write was 4 pages, I couldn’t use as much concrete details as I can now. Leaving this class I can say that a 7 page essay does not scare me as it use to. If you have the proper research and an idea of what to write about I can easily express my ideas in a clear way. My biggest goal that I accomplished this semester was being able to write research papers.
The research process isn’t easy and it was fairly new to me in the beginning of the semester. I was afraid that I was going to completely fail at writing but I managed to learn from my mistakes and grow. The hardest part about the research process was when we were instructed to collect primary research. Having to go out in public and survey people who I did not know was extremely difficult for me since I am more on the shy side. There is a lot of trial and error in the process of the research, at first I would think I had all of the sources I needed but as you begin the writing process the sources you have may not fit the direction you chose to write. While interviewing I also noticed that some of the questions I asked were not necessary and I could have asked others that mattered more and could have given me better support on my papers. It defiantly pushed me out of my comfort zone and it made me realizes how much you actually must survey and observe in order to collect data that is credible.
The revision process is easy and it is a little more clear when you’ve taken some time off of writing the essay and afterward have someone examine your work. After the first reread you notice how everything flows and how you can change around certain things to make them sound better. The strategy that was most useful was the 3 strong areas and 3 weak areas when someone points them out it is much easier to see where you can improve. The only physical copy I have of my revision is my environmental essay. This is also where I wrote out what exactly I wanted to change on my final draft. This is a very good method that worked for me, I would simply go down the list of things I needed to fix and that way I didn’t miss any of my own errors.
I have learned that the reading process is a lot more than just reading and knowing exactly everything that was told. The process is actually dissecting the reading there are certain massages that are being told to the reader that aren’t just said, you have to read into it and even do a little research of your own to truly understand it. The writing process takes quite a while and you really need to get into a zone and focus. If you are not focused than it is nearly impossible to complete. Having your ideas organized is key. Once you have your ideas down a good amount of articles that support your ideas than it is a breeze. I have progressed in the way of being able to research my topic and correctly write about it.
I believe that I have learned the necessary skills this semester because I can easily read articles, dissect them, and give a valid argument or agree with the author. I can also pick a topic and be able to write a whole 5 page essay on my opinion whether I support it or not. I can also collect my own research and explain it in an essay. I can also find research and sources that back up my arguments. I lastly, can explain the counter argument but come back and explain why my argument is better. These skills will be useful in my career and in some of my other classes because it opens up your mind to both sides. I learned that you must listen and truly see both sides of the argument before you choose a side. I still think that I could improve in really expressing all of my ideas in a better form and how to conclude the essay.
I should pass this course because I have learned how to employ direct quotation, paraphrase, and summarize for textual support. I know how to properly introduce an author and the title of the article and know how to talk about the quotations/cite and provide explanations of the quotation. I believe I have mastered applying MLA format and citing correctly. I believe that I should pass this course because although I am not the best or strongest writer I really try my best and I am really proud of my work, and because I stayed up for two whole days because I accidentally deleted all of my work while working on my final essay, where I then had to start all over again and it was so challenging having to write something over because it sounds repetitive and I almost cried but here I am somewhat alive.
In order to write my essay i did a lot of brainstorming, i had to write out some of my main ideas down, and figure out the top ideas i had to write all of my body paragraphs about. Then i tried to write as much details, opinions, and any thing that could be useful for the body paragraphs. I tend to get into a zone and ideas just come out naturally once i have been thinking about my topic. Afterward I reorganize everything so that there is a good flow throughout my essay. It is very important to reread and alter or move around anything that seems out of place.
I then revised my conclusion and made sure all of the important topics were brought up in the conclusion. I feel as if my introduction really sets the mood for the whole essay, it brings an image, a story, and emotion to the readers head. I could have had more statistics and facts as i would like but over all i am not disappointed.
I researched credible websites, trusted newspapers, and google scholar. I did lack in some more sources, if i had a couple more sources it could have made my essay more persuasive. I also wish i could have had more sources from books, television, or radio.
What is the problem with structural/institutional racism as you see it?
- Immigrants aren’t getting proper health care because of their low income, and the environment they live in.
- Unequal opportunities.
Who is affected by this problem? Why?
- Low income individuals
What is your solution?
- Offer free clinics supporting people who don’t have the proper money
- Offer programs that can help immigrants pursue a nursing career and be able to be given the same opportunities as citizens
- Racial inequalities in the health care system: Low income households would not be able to afford regular clinical treatments.
- Opening a free or low cost clinic to the community
- Providing diversity in health care provides fair and equitable care
How feasible is it?
- slightly feasible, it is not easy to make everyone to agree that immigrants are
How effective would it be?
- Very effective, free clinics with proper nursing and health care can really improve the lives of the immigrants.
What types of racism would it address?
Have a list of six sources you will use.
Provide brief summary explaining what ideas/quotations will you use from those sources.
Create an outline for your essay.
Be clear about where each source will be used in the essay.
How is this group objectified?
- Seen as low income individuals who are not able to afford the healthcare cost and won’t be able to pay and, so, are turned away.
How do institutional structures create inequalities for this group?
- Health care that is not sensitive/considerate to each individual’s unique health problem(s) may cause individuals to sustain life threatening problems.
How do social obstacles create inequalities for this group?
- Unequal job opportunities
- Environment/city you live in
What are some of the effects of these institutional and social inequalities on the people of this group?
- Not having proper treatment or not taking preventative action can cause the individuals to have long term problems or even be fatal.
1) What problem do you want to research?
– Colleges and universities don’t have enough study areas causing many students to perform badly/ not have the proper tools to be successful.
2) What research methods will you use?
– Surveys with students in Mt Sac, interviews with some professors
3) Provide examples of these research methods?
- Could you say that Mt Sac could use mare study areas for the students?
- Do you think that the lack of study areas around campus could affect students’ success in a negative way?
- Have you or anyone you know struggled to find somewhere to study?
- On a scale of 1-10 (1 being poor and 10 being excellent) how would you rate the amount of study areas in his campus?
4) Find 5 Sources and explain how you will use these sources
5) Provide a detailed plan for you will do this research. Plan should include:
Exact dates of when you will do each step.
-over the weekend of 11/17-11/20
How you will conduct the primary research
-Surveys/ a couple of interviews
Who will be the subjects?
-Students of Mt sac
What problems or difficulties might arise in conducting this research?
-people may not want to participate, or I may not find people who are in need of more study areas in this college.
“I saw that what divided me from the world was not anything intrinsic to us but the actual injury done by people intent on naming us, intent on believing that what they have named us matter more than anything we could ever actually do.” (Coates 120).
Coates indicates that no matter how badly you want to ignore somebody and not let their words get to you, it eventually will get into your head. It doesn’t matter if you let it affect you on not this then shapes the person you become. Coates his whole life has lived in a world where “blacks” are looked down on, treated as close to nothing, and are always violent. Coates then realizes that everyone looks at him that way so he has to be extra careful with his words and actions because people may feel threatened.
Imagine living in a home where your parents are constantly telling you that you will never succeed, or that you are no good at school. You hear it so much that you begin believing it and because they expect nothing of you, you will give them nothing. Because they already have that image of you there is no point of you trying or excelling in anything, you have already let your parents down.
I completely agree with Coates, there has been times where I am guilty of doing that to myself. Where I tell myself I’m going to do bad on an essay or I’m going to fail a class, and slowly i start believing myself and sure enough i don’t do well and sadly i have failed a class. Once I have already have put the expectation in my head and accepted the fact, then I don’t try as hard as I should.
“And no one would be brought to account for this destruction, because my death would not be the fault of any human but the fault of some unfortunate but immutable fact of “race,” imposed upon an innocent country by the inscrutable judgement of invisible gods.” (Coates 86).
Coates explains that in this country race is something made up by the people to categorize one another. To assign a human being to a class, either being high or low class. This race is what causes the death of many individuals every day. We have a mindset that just because we see another color other than white that they must be up to no good. They must have bad intentions and therefore be punished on the actions that we assume they were going to take before they even do anything. in this case it is death.
I agree with Coates on the fact that race is something completely made up of people who simply want to judge one another without sounding insanely racist. I believe that it is a word that simply tells the world where you are from and then puts you in a category.
I strongly disagree with Coates argument when he states that it is no ones fault but the “race” for people who die because of racism. No one is born hating a certain type of person, no one becomes that way unless they are taught a certain mindset. Only we can blame ourselves for ever thinking any less of someone because if their skin color.